Shaelieh

Name: Angie LuCrane Age: 17 or 18 Gender: Shes a chica ;D Personality: A little outrageous, is always a team leader and decides things if people join her or not. ...

Oh boy, I usually dont look at vampire stories because Im sick of them but this one needs some help. I'm sorry but I don't like your writing style. In ...

Is huggybear123 talking about the English version of naruto? Obviously that version sucks ass. Try watching the Japanese version with subtitles! Much better haha. And yes, the manga is not ...

It needs a bit of work but your insight would be appreciated I have pronunciation for all the names or cities because I had a hard time myself I had ...

Even if it is the intro, extend it Otherwise everyone else covered it, explain a bit more about the characters and the plot. Then I think your all set. Defiantly ...

Well lets see here, Try not to 'enter and tab' when you do actions. Your plot, you need to figure out when it is and what kind of kingdom Is ...

NOTE: This was very limited on description but please criticize! I’ve always loved you She skipped along the wrecked pavement walking path, her converse stretching along the ground. The neon ...

Here's a small comment From shaelie Dont make your sentences so long, just cut them back a bit. You use alot of interesting words and such but use simple words ...

Thanks for replying dreamwalker, I'll update my story and take your advice

I lay there, listening to their pleas, crying out to reach a life form. I could only sit there, upon the satin gold laced bed cover, pondering over my brethren. ...

I think you have the right idea main plot and all. But my advice is to pick either a vampire or wizard dont put both in your story, it makes ...

I lay there, listening to their pleas, crying out to reach a life form. I could only sit there, upon the satin gold laced bed cover, pondering over my brethren. ...