Shady

Thanks for the review! That all makes sense. I don't love ending with her thoughts, either. I was just getting told my middle-of-action endings felt too abrupt so I was ...

But thank you for the review! The ending makes a lot of sense. I'll try to be better about that!

I mean I moved the old chapter twos out of this folder so the only one out of place is the chapter three?

Definitely good to know!

Thanks so much for the review! I'd especially like your feedback on Chapter 4 when it's finished. I had another idea for a bit of conversation with her and Kieran ...

Aha, thanks so much for the review! Yeahhh this novel went from 12 to 18 real quick xD I'm glad that this version is better, though! I'm having a good ...

Thanks so much for the reviews!

Thanks so much for the review! I appreciate it!

Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad that you're liking this version better :D

Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad to hear that this version is better :D The physician thing I'm planning to expand on a bit more, but yeah, it's ...

Thanks so much for the review! Sorry it got confusing lol. Basically this comes directly after chapter one, so the bit with them going through the tunnels after meeting the ...

Thanks so much for the review! I actually did post a revised version of Chapter Two ^.^ But DRAGON CHAPTER lol. Staying in the cave for more than like, three ...

Ahaha I mean fair, I decided to rename noot-noot man in this draft of BtD and kept having to smack myself away from Ky and Ae and Rik names xD ...

Thanks for your super speedy reviews! I'm glad you like this draft better :D

Thanks for the review! I... yeah I have no excuse for the fingernail thing. That's not how hands work, is it? xD I'll definitely think on how to revise this! ...