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Re: Gods Of Fate- Prologue
This won't be much of a critism, as you appear to be much more talented at writing than I, but I would like you to know I think this is ...
Dec 14, 2009 -
Re: Aradel's Daughter Preface
Okay, so this is, overall, quite good. You have the base but you need to work on sentence structure. When you describe her hair, you might want to use something ...
Dec 14, 2009 -
Re: The Outcasts
Okay, so this is just an idea on a story. please give some critique! I awoke to the sun coming in the small window of the hut. I rolled over ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: untitled
good story! I enjoyed the realism of the teen world.
May 17, 2009 -
Re: Love at First Sight
Well, this was quite good, but I did notice that you made a slight mistake "I tried to through it off me, but my efforts were futile." Throw, not through, ...
May 17, 2009 -
Re: Newbie intro
Hey everyone... I thought I would just introduce myself. Of course, I won't give any personal info, but here are some basics. I have been writing for five years and ...
May 6, 2009
