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Re: Do you like this poem?
you could cut the last two lines out to leave it and let us wonder whether thay got off, what really happened. It might add to it a bit more.
Oct 20, 2006 -
Re: Can a maypole dream?
I got a bit carried away. i think because of the line length it's not actually that much longer than a normal poem but I haven't checked that.
May 5, 2006 -
Re: Four Haikus
On the middle line of 4 it seemed a bit like the 'here' was just there because it needed to fit with the pattern. For a first haiku these are ...
May 3, 2006 -
Re: Free Fall
It's really good. The only thing I'm not sure about it the 2nd line. It doesn't seem to flow as well. Other than that i love the feelings and the ...
May 3, 2006