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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Dark Innocence(Edited)

    Hi there! Let's start with cons... You switch from first-person to third-person. In some cases, it might make sense, but the reason why it's unnatural here is because Lord Ashzen ...

    Feb 1, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Finding Alana

    Hello! I like the premise. It's ridiculous :) 25 kids? Anyway, with reviews I like to start with cons, so we can end on a good note. Speaking of "good ...

    Jan 24, 2012


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