Seibhris

This is the first 1000 words of a work in progress called Red Skies . It takes place in the future during the Battle of Armageddon. This story is a ...

CHAPTER 1 of HAVEN 1 I began my climb up the side of a dense, green, tree-covered mountain. Fred and three others followed behind closely, bows drawn and arrows stretched ...

This is good. Very good. But the main idea of these two paragraphs seem like they didn't come from the beginning of a book (leaving out Wulfric's introduction at the ...

My computer is acting up. A lot of words in the story have been cut out for some reason. I will have this fully posted and ready later today. Sorry.

1 I began my climb up the side of a dense, tree-covered mountain. Fred and three others followed behind closely, bows drawn and arrows stretched back, prepared for anything. A ...

Thanks to both of you. Both are outstanding pieces of advice. Thanks again! :D

Thanks a lot guys. That's some good advice. :D

How well did I portray the image? Jared was running through the wasteland as fast as his body would permit. He was exhausted. His condition was growing rapidly, and it ...

Thanks for the help. I will also be posting several paragraphs from a war novel that I stopped writing several weeks ago.

This was a very good piece. It had me interested from the beginning. Great job! :) 8 out of 10.

Answer: It is my perfect outlet.

These are two paragraphs from the middle of my novel taking place during the 100 years war in the middle ages. Is this piece worded properly? What could make it ...

I'm not a professional editor... but besides several grammatical errors, this piece was outstanding!! :D Thanks for submitting it! -Seibhris

Could have used a much better choice of words. Some punctuation and grammar might be lacking, and everything seemed to happen a bit fast. On the other hand, the story ...

For the most part a good choice of words. Entertaining. It is a good thing you brought it in for a review because it needs to be revised. There were ...