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Re: Just Breathe
Over all I like it. You had some typos, grammar, and punctuation mistakes, but other then that It was great. Good luck next time.
May 24, 2011 -
Re: The gay guy in the bar
I get what you were trying to go with this, but you made too many mistakes. -grammar -rating -punctuation -structure -flow Ok, I know I’m being rude, so I’ll stop ...
May 24, 2011 -
Re: Landon
I liked it. Ok, well, it could have been better. You’ve got the idea ,but here some things that need correction. It all needs to keep the same flow. Most ...
May 24, 2011 -
Re: Silent Deceit
It was great and I loved it! I wasn’t so sure about the rhyming you did though. not every single line has to rhyme with the line before or after ...
May 23, 2011 -
Re: Woman
Well, I get the idea, but YOU didn’t quite get it. You really need to read over everything. If one thing doesn’t fit, well, take it out. Every word, phrase, ...
May 23, 2011 -
Re: Lesson in Breaking
I don’t know what to say, it was wonderful! I loved it! The best thing I’ve read all night! Wow I just need a moment to cry about how unbelievably ...
May 23, 2011 -
Re: Night or the World
Do you venture into the shadows of the evergreens when nothing is to be seen but in shades of a raven? Do you call out for company when the sun ...
May 23, 2011 -
Re: Young One
I love the idea, and the expression, WOW! Don’t misunderstand me, but around the end I felt like I was lost. It was kind of like going into a scary ...
May 23, 2011 -
Re: Father
It absolutely is wonderful, and the expression and tone of it? Well, how I should put this, PERFECT! I could really feel your pain, then again maybe it was your ...
May 23, 2011 -
Re: Calligraphy
It’s beautiful but it still lacks. I can tell it’s not some of your best work. At one point I felt that the flow and tone of the passage was ...
May 23, 2011
