Sapphirejay

Haven't done this in a while, so bare with me :[ Overall, I love it. It has just enough emotion to be satisfactory, and you almost want to say "No! ...

The Bee told the Butterfly; "I will sting you You always get in the way Looking pretty everyday you seem to have not one care Though you have enemies everywhere ...

The mountains sing a song unknown The wind cries it’s plea, The river rushes out past the rocks to me A bear stumbles onto his back His mother comes to ...

Bam! The bullet shot and killed my parents on April 12, 1899 leaving me running for my life to the open prairie. I should have seen that my neighbor Zarane ...

Fun poem! The rhyming is good but the pattern is this and that. The first two stanzas are the same pattern, then you abandon it in the rest. Then in ...

There are purple blossoms, like great bunches of grapes Cool image! The last line doesn't really make sense to me Oh grave new world, that has such things in it. ...

Well written! If you knew you were the victim of my poetry, Would you really start to look at me? See past the past, through the threats, Would you let ...

This is a very nice first chapter! There is a few things I noticed: The waterfall ahead of me is splashing water on the rocks surrounding it; but the rocks ...

This is unique poem, I like it. But there is some things you should consider. 1) the poem goes of in strange places. For example: i have been in the ...

Pigs from space travelled to earth in a rocket. Bringing with them our pork filled doom. A good start on the poem, but I would use a spell checker here. ...

I prefer to write everything by hand, and it always has to be in a notebook. The feeling of an empty piece of paper in a notebook makes me want ...

Feedback much appreciated! Hide to learn Fight to live Deal with pain Live with all This is what you have to do To survive this crazy world Sing a song ...

This is a nice poem, but it needs more describing, because there is too much narration and not enough showing, like said before... What I also noticed is They heard ...

That they had

The rhyming was great, the beat was good. Very well done! What I would change though is the first line, Sisters screech and bicker and scream, and pull out each ...