Sannah

I love your writing style! :) Everything is really clear and I can see the whole scene with your imagery. It's a very beautiful piece. When you started it out, ...

Everybody thank you for the feedback! :) I will soon edit my work and add a lot more description, but I find it hard to write about that when I ...

Thank you for all the feedback! :) I'll remember all of your advice when I rewrite my poem. When I finish I'll post it.

Thank you for the feedback! Ok, I fixed it and added punctuation, meaning I probably now have too many grammar problems to count... And the thing about there being only ...

About what PurifyingFire said... Susannah follows Sannah like a shadow but it is really Susannah who overshadows Sannah no matter how hard she tries or what she does. Sannah just ...

Thank you for the advice. I put a line in-between each paragraph like you said and it is much easier to read now.

Thank you for the feedback! :) I was afraid nobody would even bother reading it... "I also liked your bravery for writing a poem without rhyming" Honestly, I doubt I ...