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Wow. It's amazing how this is so fast paced and descriptive. I'm impressed! :) There are some errors with spelling. Like: ""It's ashame this got prolonged to this point."" I ...

I liked this. It was different from a lot of fantasy stories I've read. Even though I read none of the other chapters, I feel like I know the characters. ...

I'm back! Ok, you did a great job on this chapter also. The characters voices were unique and consistent. I am a Skillet fan but I laughed when they were ...

This is epic... I'm not sure if it was an accident or not, but you spelled Lissiana's name wrong once here: "“I know who you are. I will always know ...

That was really good! :) The only issues were in some places commas were needed and occasionally you forgot punctuation. Also, when a another character speaks, you start a new ...

This was really good and well written! :) I liked it and don't think there is anything wrong with it at all, except one thing that struck a nerve with ...

I think most everything has been pointed out but I just have to say, I love the way you spelled Destiny! :) Destynee... That is so cool. At the beginning, ...

That. Was. Amazing !!! :D You did a really awesome job! My review probably won't help much... Since I'm just telling you how good your work is. But is really ...

This was good for a rough draft. Some of it was a bit confusing for me, especially the end. I wasn't sure what was going on, but I did get ...

Dad's name is Robert. I don't see anything wrong with this. You described Robert's situation and opinions well, along with his reasons for them. I like how the information is ...

You're descriptions are beautiful and paint a perfect picture for me. :) I love how you describe the characters. Its like I know the characters even though they haven't uttered ...

I love all the emotion that you put into this story and am very sorry that some of this actually happened to you or friends. What those kids did is ...

I really like this story. :) That was totally NOT a meaningless chapter. I just had to say that- you had Sage explain the blood fang pack (should you maybe ...

I read both chapter 1 and chapter 2. They were both really good and I liked them. You did a good job of showing Ali's eating disorder and the pain ...

This. Is. Amazing. :D The only thing you really need to do is put a line in-between each paragraph so it'll be easier to read. I really liked it, it ...