Sammich

I am interested to see how this will turn out. I found it had okay pacing, yet I felt that there could have been a little more description. Maybe if ...

I'm not a big fan of beginnings that start with "It was a..." I find those to be overused and a little cliche. Also what time is this set in? ...

Wow! For a something that you just jumped on the computer to write randomly, this is great! As I was reading, I really didn't get a feel to what the ...

I really enjoyed this short story! At first I was a little bit iffy on continuing to read it but I wasn't at all let down! I liked how you ...