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My only comment on this would be- you need a really, really good set of actors to be able to pull this off properly. Why? Inexperienced actors aren't going to ...

Hey, Adam! This had a really cool, conversational style to it that flowed well and helped to keep the story going. It made me laugh quite a bit, too- your ...

Hey! I thought this story was intersting, mainly because it started out being normal- and then more-than-convincingly turned out to be a dream. The cheapest plot twist in the book? ...

I'm with Jennafina- I loved your style,too. It flows really well, and really keeps the character in mind (something you were going for, I see!). There was one major thing ...

Hey (again)! Glad to see Chapter Two...the action continues! Glad you finally resolved that whole 'does he have superpowers, or does he not?' thing- it was beginning to bother me, ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS- we don't bite. (Maybe?) I really liked the air of mystery you put around your man character (Mositas, was it?) and her journey. Even though we ...

I vaguely remember reading the first chapter a long time ago and liking it...glad to see the second part! Here's just a few things I caught: - Jasmine's a little...whiney ...

Hey! I haven't seen you around if you've got any questions about the site or my critique (which will be long and rambly, as usual), feel free to PM or ...

I would agree with Claudette in that this chapter didn't make as much sense as the others. For one, I thought the whole thing between Imogen and Owen was a ...

Ooh! More conflict! This section was good, although short, so there's only one comment: - I take it Cady's not from England, she's from America (hence the name), which is ...

This is a good story so far- the style is easy to read, yet you do quite a bit of showing instead of telling. How do you do it? :shock: ...

A few things I noticed: - The beginning didn't really draw me in. I liked the middle part very much, but the very beginning? Not so much. If I were ...

I would add in more about how crazily fun it is- and about the spiffy winner's certificate. There seemed to be a little more emphasis on who lost, rather than ...

Hey, Pros! I don't think I've ever read any of your stuff before- but this was a great first impression, in my book (not...literally, of course). Your main character was ...

That was probably the coolest ending I've ever read... All right, so in the History Lovers forum, Jack was basically talking about how the character development really mattered in his ...