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Oh, goodness, Volant! I wrote this a really long time ago. XD But you're totally right. I still have a problem with that to this day. Thanks for the critique, ...

Hey, ForgottenAuthor! Oh, goodness, eighth grade Home Ec...who doesn't have horror stories stemming from it? ^_~ A cute boy is always a nice twist, though. I did enjoy the fact ...

Hey, Eimear! This is a really cool story. Your style is very conversational and flows quite well, so it's easy as well as fun to read--something that's rather hard to ...

How come there aren't already gun laws in America? You;d think that after Columbine it would be the obvious thing to do. Second Amendment, darling. We love it, apparently. To ...

Oh, goodness! *tackles with love* You're amazing, Haley. I'm trying to find a way to define the sparrows--I have a really symbolic paragraph later on, but that's much later, and ...

Currently being mercilessly slaughtered and toiled over.

Hey, Ten Sweet Bliss! Katharsis is right. ^_~ You have a really awesome style--it flows well, and you know how to put a sentence together. (Doesn't sound like it should ...

*shameless plug* So, I've been hacking away at The Parking Lot Sparrows for the past several days. If you really loved me, you'd read the first part and then go ...

[IX. THE GRIEF COUNSELOR] I have a box of Kleenex on every flat surface in the room. It keeps things clean—I ran out once, and a woman wiped her nose ...

.White.Poem.- Welcome to YWS! Of course it helped. ^_^ Thanks for the review--and this is only the first part. There'll be at least two more. Aedomir- *hides from English teacher* ...

Hey, Volant! This was a really eye-opening piece--there aren't that many things written about gang members. I read a lot of stuff about high school crushes and dances and drama, ...

Paranoia. I haven't the time for bogeymen, but they're there. - Luke Ooh! Pretty girls. Isn't everyone a slave to pretty girls? Besides Mommy, but you know. - David Mmm. ...

I have personal issues with the word 'purge', in context with bodily fluids. So maybe just 'purge'? Short and sweet is what you want with this one, I think. Missa ...

[I. THE PARKING LOT SPARROWS] We found him first. His arms were spread like a drifting thrush, east to where the sun rises over the horizon. As Icaruss before him, ...

"The All-Seeing Glasses" is pretty cool, but I usually have difficulty with anything with 'chronicle' in the title. Chronicle suggests itself to me something long and tedious, so you might ...