Sam

I was really cool. Your descriptions are very vivid, and I like how the main character notices everything. Like the girl with the French braids and the guy behind the ...

But he was friendly, funny, popular, and slightly good-looking, so it wasn't hard to become friends. My head was still pounding with an splitting headache, but I didn't complain. Kyle ...

"there's a space on the roof we can get through." I bit my lip, afraid. Why was I so nervous. "But it's, uh, a long drop..."

again, firestarter, you're a great poet! I love the way, at the end of the second stanza, you stop and then finish the sentence at the beginning of the third...don't ...

don't bother, firestarter- there's not really anything TO change!

This poem was OK...needs some revisions, though. :D I think you use the word 'you' a lot, and for this length of a poem, you don't describe 'you' enough. 'Waiting ...

I sat on the crumbling roof, closing my eyes and just breathing the fresh air and wondering, when, where else can you get such an exhilerating feeling? The house groaned ...

"Where are you taking me?" Kyla asked, apprehensively gripping the fuzzy uphosteroly in the car. The lady in the navy blue looked at her uncomfortably from the rearview mirror. "Oh...it's ...

"Memories?" Kyle's soft, tan features suddenly hardened and he raised an eyebrow. "You lost your memories..." "I didn't!" I felt trapped. Kyle was the only one who really understood me, ...

to agree with nate...yeah, the dialogue needs some work but other than that, you've got a cool story going here. If you've got any more, I really want to read ...

quoting one of my boy-obsessed friends *ooh sam will you please talk to him for me PLEASE seriously gene I need your help...he's soo hot!* (gag choke barf)

I'm the slightly insane extreme extrovert so I can't really help you shy people...:D

OK...I'm going to do the Incandescence sort of meditative no-capitals thing... you know, I used to think that the whole sixth-grade-supposed-love thing was overrated but can I dream? you're beautiful,

I know...I can't find anything either...well at least it helps to know someone took the time to read it, eh?

*crying softly* OMG this is sooo cool...I love how it's like going from how you're like hopeless too looking for heaven...this is beautiful! (k, sam, find something to critique!) Gotta ...