Sam

I thought this was really well written. The voice of the girl in the poem is so strong, you actually feel a bit sorry for her. That, my dear Wulie, ...

Ooo...yes! I agree with Nate, however, you have this bloody battle going on and you don't say anything about it, only 'there was a battle going on'. Which is painfully ...

This was really good guys! I wish I had something to say...but I don't. *sigh*

Cool...that one was hard! *lol* I don't know what I did with mine...

gosh I keep getting it wrong...sorry!

forgot the link!

welcome! just somethign that I noticed!

I really liked this, even though it is rather short...one thing, though, that caught my eye- you describe really, really vividly, but you don't say anything about the little girl's ...

This was a pretty big deal here...*lol* My aunt was the one who got him into the marching band...she's the one with the red hair, if you ever see her ...

I would have earlier, but I already play the saxophone...and my dad says I can't start a new instrument until I practice more.

Have no idea...I miss Sirius too...*waah*

I want to...electric, at least!

Sure...that would be awesome! Can't wait!

All I can say is...you have a very elegant writing style. It's very formal, perfect. And you have impeccable grammar. What more could a reader ask for? My only critique ...

Yes! I agree...you have great descriptive bits in this piece, like the amethyst eyes. You kind of lose it at the end, but if you just make it a bit ...