Sam

I have to say I liked it. I still caught some bits, though... You use the word 'past' twice in the first stanza alone. Choose a different word. I think ...

I really like this poem. Just two bits... spelled 'black' wrong. Unless blcak is a word I've just never heard of before. last stanza third line- 'anger to "sweets" ' ...

First of all, it's h-y-p-o-c-r-i-s-y. You spelled it wrong in the title. Second, you skip around a lot. It's very confusing to the reader because we think 'woah, didn't I ...

paid

it's a writing site

Just a question...I recieved a pm about it and just thought I'd ask. *lol* Nate rescued us...we're sort of revolting now because of the management. It's a war zone over ...

Well...if you're that biased, (no offense) you have to be mad at like 99.5% of the world population. It's wrong, but if there's justice behind it...

Bobo!!!! I'm EFNP too! :D

pail

I'm in a extreme case of writer's block so yeah...I like editing

personally I think we're lingually challenged...I was reading this one book 'There is No Zoo in Zoology' and it said we've dropped so many sounds from English and we've messed ...

1. Firestarter, for obvious reasons... 2. Wasn't it like universally agreed that...uhm, Incandescence for this one? *lol* 3. I have to agree with Brian...somebody like freakforchrist who hasn't posted

I would like to see it too..but my computer says 'Internet Explorer does not know how to handle this application'...well duh, computer... :(

i don't have any criticism except for one line, 'I bow like a sapling', really drags on the flow and makes us stop and go 'what?' looking for a reference. ...

I have to say I enjoyed it too. As with Brian, no criticism from me either. I really did love the last line...:D *sigh*