Sam

YAY! Nameless Creepy Girl is back! But I have to say, I really like this guy Bevan. I don't know why...I just do. Sorry, Willow, I don't have anything helpful ...

It was good without romanticizing. Although, we people do not talk to each other without knowing who's saying what.

At the beginning, it's kinda...lame. Towards the middle and end, however, the writing gets stronger. My only thing, it is very confusing when you have dialogue, because you never tell ...

Indoor plumbing...no. Maybe a powder room, but she would have to have tons of willing servants to draw water for her in order to get the bath. Other than that, ...

*yusss* that is my area of I can be really annoying about that now. :twisted:

muahahahaha! 'tis FECES, Brad!

GO GO GO NIKKI NIKKI NIKKI!!!

Have to agree. Lose the numbers!!! (muahahaha i commented)

KAY KAY! you keep avoiding the question at hand- what time period would this be taking place in? lol. You keep using modern phrases and such that clash terribly with ...

I just realized this now...but wouldn't they have an alcohol ration? Unless they are stationed in a town or something, these soldiers probably would not be allowed enough alcohol to ...

Thanks, Jack, but I usually just post them separately because otherwise it's hard for new readers to crit the first chapter or something. :D and this was supposed to feel ...

For me, I thought this was a really important section, yet you didn't put enough emphasis on it. Make it more like a revelation, and add a lot more details. ...

LOL! hee...

I felt, personally, that it was best for her to go. I sound horrible, I know, but poor Terri, how would you feel hooked up for 15 years to a ...

As of yet, I'm not really sure, because we haven't been given a true taste of the story, just the fact that she's married to this guy we don't really ...