Sam

My writing started when...I guess, in first grade, when my best friend and I would have huge competitions as to who could write the longest story. My record was 23, ...

Noooooo.... please, i beg of you, come up with part two!

*meep* I'm kind of confused at the end though...did the guy or the horse fall over the ridge? Other than that, it was pretty good. Nothing profound, but good nonetheless.

Snoink- for finding flaws, is it better to start with a storyline and then come up with characters? Or is it better to start with characters and fit a storyline ...

*sob* Why do you have to trash the sweater vest!!!!! *everyone stares at sam* NO, i'm not wearing one, nope...

OK, folks...brace yourselves...this is what 99% of Nebraska looks like. I bet Qi could vouch for me here... OMG folks, I'm scaring myself, it's so awesomeness...*snore* My city, you ask? ...

*cries* THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU! I am now currently trying to find flaws...erg... (Luke's easy...the rest...not so easy...)

Erg! Is this the end? It had better not be the end...lol. Hee, I caught the last line. Very well done, Kay Kay!

Don't put the horse's name in italics...it's not a boat, for God's sake. Sorry I wasn't here earlier! Internet troubles. :D

This is pretty funny, actually. I love the main character... Although, the idea of crime scene investigation was fairly new at the would be slightly like calling in the witch ...

HEY LITTLE FELLA THE ROLL LOOKS BARE HOPEFULLY MAMA'S GOT SOME SHE CAN SHARE! WHAT YOU USED TO LOVE NOW YOU'RE GONNA ADORE... WITH CHARMIN ULTRA LESS IS MORE! WHEN ...

Hmm...

Much, much better. And you'd better be happy...I gave you an actual critique...

You'll find out why in a moment...

HAH! Do not post here...unless...*heckyess I am going to end this* you have 20/200 vision or worse in one or both eye/s. (that would be me...)