Sam

Yes, I read the rating, but still. For the first section, it seemed like you were playing that good ol' childhood game: HOW MANY TIMES CAN I USE THE SAME ...

OOOH! I finally get the title! *slaps forehead* Ahh, my interpretation: guy likes girl (before poem starts)>love hides all flaws, o'course>another guy comes on horseback, apparently very loudly and wi

*before reading was prepared to give seventeen-paragraph-long harsh critique about how horrible the poem was, but jaw now rests on floor in shock* Well done, Ari! (if I may call ...

OOOHH RANDOM EMOTIONAL RANT! YAY! I have to break it to you Liz, however, that as a piece of writing this wasn't all that great. You lost me by the ...

Actually...no, I don't believe in ghosts. But they're still fun to taunt your little brothers with. :twisted:

Well...uhm...it's not the beginning, but that's okay...

Fine is good. We use that a lot. :D

I had to post something...this is FAR from final...tell me what you think. At dusk, I wander alone to the edge of the commons, my mind gently meandering and a ...

I thought you had a very good pace to this, up until the part where Julia and her father head up to her room...there it just got very rushed, and ...

This was absolutely beautiful at the beginning, but you began to slip near the end- you got to rambling. ' Julia opened her eyes sluggishly, curious as to why he ...

YAY!!!! Okay...I've got to actually critique something now... First of all, 'Phillie' is 'Philly'... 'I went with a grey long-sleeved shirt with a deep red one over the top, blue ...

Listening to The Scientist, typing this, chatting with EBM, and working on my blog. Ah, multi-tasking.

Unless you count the crude sixth-grader method of kicking people...then no...

Like the first Birds of War, it's still really good. I don't think my what you could call a critique will change.

Amsterdam- Coldplay