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Re: Gypsie Eyes: chapter two
Hey again, Gyr! Okay, so, I have to say I love Karenna and Tannar together. They're like brother and sister, except slightly more competitive. :wink: They're great, as are the ...
Jun 22, 2008 -
Re: Gypsie Eyes: prologue and chapter one
Gyr! Sorry it took me so long to get to this, but! Here I am now. I don't read fantasy, so I usually don't know what to expect beyond the ...
Jun 22, 2008 -
Re: Dance for Love, Chapter Two/ Revised
Woah, bunnie! Hold your horses. :wink: It usually takes a day to get a few critiques, maybe a little longer. Since you're new, it might help to get your name ...
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: Dance for Love, Chapter One/ Revised
Hey, bunnie_i_am! I know it's been a few days, but welcome to YWS. ^_^ This looks like it's going to be a really interesting story--I know absolutely nothing about dance ...
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: The Prologue to Everything
It’s half-past midnight, but I can’t see a thing for the dark. My pupils are looped to the size of thumbnails, and though they threaten to burst you’re just a ...
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: catch 22
Gadster! I must tell you, 2 and 3 are absolutely beautiful. The way you punctuated them was strange, but effective--I love it when someone uses something I've never seen before ...
Jun 18, 2008 -
Re: Quotes
You can use BBcode! Take whatever you want to quote, and put it in brackets (NOT PARENTHESES--I'm only using them so that it doesn't actually code things). (quote)text(/quote) It should ...
Jun 18, 2008 -
Re: Deleted
Heidi! *throws love at* Okay, so I absolutely adore this piece. Jamie and Pete are great characters, and I choked up a little reading the sweater scene. It was really ...
Jun 18, 2008 -
Re: Adie's Story (Pt. 1)
Hey, LRabbit! Welcome to YWS. I was completely sucked into this story. XD I was going to take notes to take a proper critique, but I kind of...forgot about them. ...
Jun 18, 2008 -
Re: Fighting the Blue
Hey, Angel of Death! Ooh, mob story. Faaabulous. :wink: Mickey is great as the suave bad-guy character--he's definitely a lot of fun to read about. This whole story was a ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: An Underwater Savior
Hey, scasha! This is super cool! I've never seen someone else do a story quite this way--it was interesting, and definitely timely. It's something I should direct certain people to. ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: meeting Kengo and others
Hey, HorseFreak! Welcome to YWS. ^_^ This is rather short, but you've definitely set the mood for an interesting story. What makes your narrator's family so unnacceptable? I suppose I ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: Hi there!!
Hey, writergirl94! Haha, Doctor Who fan? I think you'll find a lot of friends. :wink: Glad to see you around--welcome to YWS! If you have any questions or need help ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: In McCain another Bush, or worse?
(Vern--no media source is "entirely neutral". The New York Times happens to be a liberal-leaning source.) For many Americans, McCain = republican = Bush = bad. The Republican party as ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: This is it.
Sarah! *rubs with fish* You and your relatable-ness make me rather happy at this moment--because I could. It's at the same time naughty and elegant, a bit like very expensive ...
Jun 17, 2008
