Sam

Oooh! Oh, dear, looking at it now, I am indeed reading too many books at once...:P Treasure Island , by Robert Louis Stevenson Catch-22 . by Joseph Heller John Lennon: ...

Versailles! YAY! I shall critique as I read, so sorry for any rambling thoughts, etcetera. 'My face remained unwashed; my thick, golden-auburn hair was lathe with the dirt and sweat ...

Ah, yes, you lost me- not from boredom, but because your dialogue needs some work. SOME BASIC TIPS: 1. Your characters don't need to say 'eh' constantly. It's, eh, kind ...

The suspense is good, but next time, post a bit more. :wink: Besides being very vague, you don't start off very well. The fact that 'The dark sky was filled ...

Old, icky, unedited post- begone!

I don't think I've ever read a book that disturbed me...1984 was just cool. I must be dense. :P

I quite liked the first version- though I do hope some explanation comes of the next chapter, so we won't be crying 'Incest!' :wink: Anyway...the only reason I didn't enjoy ...

Yes, I noticed that too... Well, glad it's back up!

Oh my...we certainly don't have any superflous people here , do we?

Most definitely Abbey Road...

Oooh, excellent! I knew it was too good to be...untrue. :P Just please, for the love of God, let us know next time. :wink:

I agree with Crysi...especially due to the fact that the logo fits in with Standard and doesn't look like you pasted it in. :lol:

I'm going to critique as I please excuse little random trains of thought on individual lines. ' I had just spoken to on the phone was John Punnett, despite the ...

OMGZ!!!!! This wuz sooooooo soooo awwwwsome GOOD WORK! plz write more soooon. Or I'm like gonna cry lolz

This piece... AS WRITING: Very, very excellent. AS A SHORT STORY: Horrible. WHY? At the end of the story, we're not quite sure who this girl is, where she is, ...