Sam

It's great when you post a story you're excited about and then notice that five minutes later someone's posted a comment, isn't it? [I'm adding a dramatic pause in so ...

Yay! Another 13-year-old! (I had my birthday three days ago- I feel very grown up. :P) STUFF YOU DID WELL: - You've got an interesting main character. She's rich, but ...

Does he have 'wavy, jet-black hair' and 'striking eyes'? :wink:

I'd also recommend the Dandy Warhols and Muse. Both a little out there...

Influence is good, as long as you're not trying to totally emulate the way that that person writes. Then you're just setting yourself up for failure. But overall? The little ...

Thank you guys for getting it so quickly! By the way- if anyone can think up a good priest name, do tell me. I've just realized 'Father Thompson' is the ...

Old, icky, unedited post- begone!

HAHAHA, when someone...wasn't...having sex? *flips through book* Can't find it. :wink: That was a very good book...and I must say, the sex did really give a perspective on the culture. ...

All right! I most definitely owe you for reading my story, so here are my long winded suggestions. :wink: ' log cabin.'- No matter how accurate this description might be, ...

I did really like that image of summer being merely a mindset in a place where it's always sort of lazy and warm...other than that, it was pretty short to ...

YES! This is very, very excellent. I'll just jot down stuff as I read... -'I'm hoping the breeze in my brown hair doesn't make it hard to comb tonight before ...

All right! So, after carefully considering: THE GOOD NEWS: This story held my attention to the very end. Good job. THE BAD NEWS: I know from experience that the whole ...

Well, if it's an assignment...turn it in as is and your teacher will still be extremely impressed! Hehe...though it seems far too complex an idea to be for school. Is ...

Well, that's certainly a good thing. :wink: However...appeal to the MC's senses? I'm totally new to the omnipotent viewpoint, so how would I do something like that? Thanks for reading!

*cackles* Well, if you read my latest post in Historical Fiction for a designated amount of sections, why not? :D PM away!