Sam

Tell me, why has no one critiqued this? :wink: Okay, so...I'm not normally a gushy person. I've never written a 'It's good! Write more!' critique in my life (at least ...

I know this is old- but it's a cool story, nonetheless. STUFF YOU DID WELL: - Notch an hum- just dumb enough to be clever. :wink: Honestly, who thought something ...

Ahoy! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - You've got a cool introduction. Usually I don't like the conversational stuff in a narrator- but you pulled it off really well. - The ...

All right...here goes. :P I very much liked the thing about 'is this how the old man feels?'. Good stuff- but it could be reinforced, mainly because it seems to ...

Ahoy! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - The line that was on the end of the blade about memories was very cool. It definitely had a mysterious feel to it. - ...

Haven't seen you around the forums before...so, hey! STUFF YOU DID WELL: - The perspective (perspective, not POV, because you're in Omnipotent) switch between random characters gave us a little ...

I swear, I can't write anything serious. :P But nonetheless...let me unveil my shiny (and sparkly) first attempt at a sci-fi. --- December 10, 1985 The news footage- men in ...

I'll review Historical Fiction, Other Fiction...and maybe a poetry forum. This shall be fun...:twisted: EDIT: Never mind. I'll do anything story or poem related that I can get my hands ...

I don't know many straight facts, but the book 'Nory Ryan's Song' by Patricia Reilly Giff might offer some perspective. It's easier to learn through a good story, no?

I shall do this by section, just because it's easier that way... SECTION ONE: THINGS YOU DID WELL: - Your third paragraph. The description of the book was very real- ...

Diagnosable disorders? :P Fun stuff!

"It's...er...something you wouldn't choose to speak about in civliized company, but at the All Hallow's Eve festivities with David and Liberty. Oh, do forgive me for blushing, but really- I ...

Oh, awesome! *is waiting patiently for 'Fall', whenever that is* ...Will Ferrel AND an ELO song in the preview? I'm definitely hooked. :P

...and have your readers connect! I go to Rich Kid School. That is, at least one lunchtime a year, we all gather round a table in the cafeteria and tell ...

One word: conflict. It's the most foolproof way to put in twists. And, the great thing is that there's really no way to go overboard (or underboard) with it. A ...