Sam

Hey! Haven't seen you around before, so welcome to the forums! I started to read your story (beginning at the prologue) and once I got about halfway down the list ...

This does sound quite a bit like House... Quick suggestion though: I thought the patient was hilarious, but usually people who pay a lot of money for a simple consultaion ...

My attempts at mixing in drama- which I usually fail at, because the urge to make a sarcastic crack about something is much too stong. :P NOTE: I'd normally put ...

Me? ...it's on The List. No more to say of that. - Upton You get used to it- really, you do. - Lieutenant What do you think about eastern medicine? ...

Hey, Ely! Glad to have you on YWS! ...but, you do know about the evil incorrect spelling bats? Oh, yeah. Pretty scary stuff. :wink: See you around the boards!

Granted, but they're all bumped threads that say, "Claude Wears Socks On Her Ears". I wish I could drink apple juice all day long.

Granted, but all you've learned are swear words. Hmm...I wish my handwriting weren't so sloppy.

Heya, Myth! I've got to say, I loved this story- your voice, although very steadfast and unchanging, has got a rhythm and a beauty to it that keeps everything going ...

This is sounding pretty polished already, so I don't have enough material to comprise a full critique, but there are two things that I think might help you out with ...

Sure! Whatever you think is good for the story- I just thought it might be a good idea. I've had bad experiences...Snoink told me to change my tense, and I ...

Hey! Haven't seen you around before, but that's probably just me being neglectful...:wink: I quite liked this story- it's got this kid who's recently screwed up his life. Yeah, not ...

Er...for one thing, they probably wouldn't let you have a lawyer. Trust me, I'm experienced in this situation. - Luke I know who my father'd hire for me as a ...

If I were to misplace a shoe...those little buggers mean everything to me. If one were gone- what would life be like? Bleak! Despairing! The noose would be strung straightaway. ...

Yay! Misty posted! At this point in the story, there is really nothing that's horribly and obviously wrong- no plot holes, no weak characters, so I am going to do ...

I've got to agree with Claude- most people tell you how to set up characters, but then you're left going, "WTF?! What do I do now?" Thanks, Cal! Those ten ...