Sam

Hey, Jack! This was just as interesting and refreshing as the first part- perhaps a little more, because your characters' situation was quite intriguing. Well written, good stuff, overall. Well, ...

I'd add it in into her paragraph- I didn't get the impression that Sebastian was a time bomb? I'd add in something about that, too, so that the point of ...

Gary Smith, 50-60ish. Owner of '"Smith's Paranormal Pest Control" Gary Smith's day was not going well. Driving around in his beat-up van (the windowless type that sported his company's logo ...

Hey, Shriek! I always admire the way you keep your characters so consistent- it's always them speaking, and not Shrieking blabbing on about something. I sometimes think that writers just ...

Redwall used to be absolutely epic, but sooner or later you come to the realization that it's a bunch of mice in tights frolicking about. I remember Captain Underpants as ...

Honesty? I don't like to be cynical...but I don't like getting wet with water I haven't seen poured and I don't like vomiting all over myself. -Upton Riding the boat ...

I love most everybody- except for Thomas, but that's only because Luke says he's a worthless arse. I don't know. I think he's alright, but Luke knows a lot about ...

Teehee! He will get hawt, Skyeness, or at least I hope so... Thank you guys, very, very much. I just went through and chopped up the major things- I still ...

I like the Russian writers for their long, flowy sentences- they've got a knack for making them winding, but they end with a punch. It's like a whole story compacted ...

My back hurts like all Hell. Honestly...stupid, stupid tailor said he'd put extra feathers in the mattress, but it feels like rocks. Some sort of sick goose, that is. - ...

Mainly, it would be places like attics and barns- places where you could easily stash away groups of twenty or so people. The Quakers would be a good lot to ...

*waves hand wildly* I have! I'm with you on trying for higher word counts, Claude- I've made it two years in a row. We need more danger. :wink:

Ah, you guys are so excellent! I can't thank you enough for the detailed- and new- feedback. Lots, lots more than grammar check, I'll tell you that. :D Cal- I'm ...

Ooh! That is majorly awesome- you may have to detail some more on the reenacting, sometime. :D Granted, I'm having a devil of a time with clothing as well, dealing ...

I'd do a little of each: the peasanty is good for a quick reference picture, and the desperate-for-the-job aspect just soidifies it all. Teehee, just change the breed to plain ...