Sahbrene

It's pretty good... except for the fact that I feel like you're stating the obvious at same points. Besides that, well done.

Thank you! It is actually just the opening to the story, not chapter one. I had been hoping for it to be vague as possible, for the effect of drawing ...

Fantastic! Personally, I loved it. Maybe because I'm into reading dark/possibly grotesque literature. Keep it up!

I liked the feel and theme of the poem, although I felt it could use more depth. Certain parts of it fell flat.... nearing the end. Other than that, I ...