Ryukun7

Thanks for the critique. I don't usually write poetry, and I'm not very good at it. :lol: For some reason, although I used dashes in Microsoft Word, they always appear ...

I always fall for stories like this. :D It was Saint Patrick’s Day—an event that calls for great celebration in my family, so my father had invited far too many ...

Apathy is what the world feels now, everyone wants something to be done, something to be won, But the false pretense is clear when no one cares enough to take ...

I love this piece. The description of Alan is well done! Personally, I regret that is was so short. I truly think you should expand this story to be longer. ...

My first thoughts on this piece is that it is both well-written and hauntingly realistic. “Hey Sandi, hand me another,” I slurred, as I reached my hand out to her. ...

Thanks for your opinion! :) I'll be posting more of the story soon.

This is very cute, and I can entirely understand the character. She is proud to wear her dress, but doesn't want to be mocked. She is also self-conscious, and I ...

Another work-in-progress. I'm posting it to get critique and feedback. I clutched my jacket tightly as a bone-chilling breeze went through the now abandoned streets. It once had been a ...

This really touched me. The couple's promises to stay together, but the harsh reality that came later was crushing and depressing. I truly liked the woman character in this, and ...

To start off, I think this story is AMAZING! I'm sorry I didn't critique the other parts, but I was so hooked that I kept reading! You are indeed the ...

I throughly enjoyed this piece! I loved how you decided to put a flip on a teenager's first kiss. Most romantic fiction never shows the other side of love, and ...

I really liked this poem! The style is definitely unique. The last line was my favorite, and it is entirely true. I only have one major critique. I like the ...

I really enjoyed this poem! The first two lines were my favorite, and I think they did a good job setting the poem up. I also liked the writer becoming ...

*This story is not anywhere near completion, but I would like some critique on it before I continue. Also, for some reason dashes are not showing up right now. Sorry ...

I can really relate to this poem! I'm headed off to college and my future, and that's exactly what I'm reminded of when I read this. I love the use ...