Rydia

Hmmm. My first point is that you have a lack of punctuation and should probably add more. I must agree with Whence on the starting with a cliche but I ...

Both of this poems have potential but they're a little short and they need to be written in poetry form. Try to form a structure and then mold the words ...

Who Art Thou? Who art thou that prowls passageways at dusk? Garbed in a white gown with white slippered feet. No trace left at dawn but a perfumed musk Of ...

I quite liked the rhyme actually except that it seemed forced in places and the repetition was effective but it was rather a lot to repeat. Perhaps yu should have ...

I think this poem flowed really well and the rhythm and rhyme were perfect but you switched tense for a single line in the middle - The leaves continued to ...

Thanks for the welcome everyone and nice to meet you all!

I think you need to capitalise the first letter of each line, even when it's a run on sentence, just so that it looks more like a poem. As for ...

I think it's mostly about life in general and as the title suggests the beginning and end of life. Am I anywhere near? As for the poem itself, I found ...

The language you use in this poem is rather advanced and like Matt said, the imagery is vivid and realistic. I feel that 'bright blue sky' takes away from the ...

I too like the imagery of the storm. Perhaps though, you should make more of the fact that it's building up through the poem. I love the first line, it's ...

That's a good question. I write a lot of poetry but am currently attempting to get a joint novel published (I wrote it with my sister recently and we've had ...

I like how you go through the seasons in this poem and I agree that the comparisson of humans to plants is unique and thought provoking. I can really relate ...

Simple but interesting. You obviously have a talent for languages which I envy greatly. I'm not sure what it is that I like about this poem but I think it ...

Awwww. That was really sweet and it certainly has some good ideas, you just need to work a little with your structure and try to use more elaborate language and ...

The rhythm of this poem is really good and I like how it draws the reader in. I love the final line, it's very emotional and the whole extended metaphor ...