Rydia

Hi again Alaina. Just thought I'd come read this... Scrubs is awesome but nothing can beat Ben and Jerrys cookie dough ice cream. Or there's the chocolate fudge one, or ...

This is the beginning of Claire and mine's second joint novel. The rest of chapter one will be posted when we've written it... Chapter One Mr Pailey looked upon his ...

Kat The woman stepped forward and as she moved, glass fell from her hair and slithered out of cuts in her body to shatter on the floor. No blood seeped ...

Very sweet. Maybe you should add a little colour?

I agree that a rhetorical question or question of any description can work well, especially in thought provoking poetry. Like has anyone read 'Stealing?' That starts with a question - ...

This isn't quite in the format of a poem but it's got some really vivid description so I think I'm right in saying it's poetic prose. Even so I think ...

There are certain areas I'd rephrase but it's a really good poem. In fact, I'll just make a few changes and then you can use them if you want or ...

Amelia I looked towards the ship and thought about firing my pistols again when a rope landed beside me. With a smile, I took hold of the rope and pulled ...

She's very pretty and well drawn. The dress is absoluetely gorgeous though something about her makes me think of ariel out of little mermaid. I think it's the hair. Very ...

Oooh a complex poem.Nice. The imagery in this poem is very vivid and the irregular form works really well. It seems a little fragmented in places and skips from place ...

First, I noticed two typos so let's get those out of the way... In the first stanza, you've mistyped 'when' and in the final stanza you've missed the 't' off ...

I liked this poem but I think you repeated 'last night' too often and a little more imagery would be nice. Also, your language is really simple. Try and expand ...

I have to agree that this is more like prose than poetry. You need to use more imagery and other poetic techniques. I don't really care for the context of ...

This poem was really sweet. The first criticism I have to make is that 'cold' doesn't really rhyme with 'alone' so it disrupts your rhyme scheme a little. I really ...

I like this piece, very creepy. Your imagery is strong and powerful which builds up the atmosphere and the short lines really add to it, especially at the end. I ...