Rydia

This is nice and imaginative but your tenses are a bit rough and I found a few other mistakes... Here are the corrections I think you need to make... I ...

Happy Birthday to both of you!

Kitty tiptoes into the tavern and cautiously takes a seat at the bar. "Uh. I'll have an apple juice please."

The imagery was really good in places and I think the best thing you can do with this is expand it. Add a deeper level of meaning too if you ...

I agree that you have to fix the rhymes and a more regular rhythm wouldn't hurt. Rhyme always seems a little out of place without rhythm. Also, some more imagery ...

This is okay but I don't think you describe what an enigma is completely. An enigma isn't just a list of opposites, it's so much more than that. One definition ...

I liked this poem but your line breaks seem to be quite random and the language was quite simple. My suggestion to you is to expand your vocabulary a little. ...

I think you could have had more imagery but it has an interesting concept and it's quite well written so well done. The other suggestion I'd make is perhaps a ...

Hi Stephanie, nice to meet you and welcome to YWS. If you're feeling lost or just feel like talking to someone, feel free to pm me, Heather xx

I'm not so sure about where the line breaks are either but then again this seems to be poetic prose rather than poetry and I'm still finding it difficult to ...

The outfits fine but I agree that if you're going to give her muscles they need to be more subtle.

Basically the difference is that in America you spell it how it sounds and in England you spell it how it's spelt if that makes any sense. There are pros ...

I agree with the others that you should work on the first. While the second is interesting, it's more of a riddle or something than a poem. As for the ...

Yeah the incorrect spelling of until put me off from the beginning and with out should be one word - without. Other than that it's too repetetive and lacking in ...

I think this would be better if you kept the archaic theme going. Perhaps use treachery rather than lies and something in place of cried. Wept maybe. Just a suggestion ...