Rydia

10:30 am - Katalyn "Kat there are people coming out of one of the buildings," Mike exclaimed, ducking down in his seat. I peered through the windscreen and noted that ...

River I felt a hand grasp my own and suddenly I was running faster than I have ever run before. I can't explain it but somehow my feet knew how ...

"Is Mattster crazy by any chance or do you all hear voices in your head?" Heather asks sarcastically. "Not as a general rule but Alice can communicate that way. Maybe ...

River "I'll be careful Kasko and thank you. I don't know why you and your brother are helping but we appreciate it. If I don't make it, you know what ...

Good idea. And you're right, there are loads of people out there who haven't finished a novel but you know when it feels right. Last summer I felt this way ...

Litvia "Not missing my friend and I suppose if you know that much, a little more information wont help. They have been hiding, waiting as their numbers grow; an event ...

Crack a cap, to slip it back; lubricated down the confines of your throat. The flow starts off rather well but this line disrupts it. I think that it would ...

“I did it all for you, to slip past Death the Lie I sung it all for you, to watch the stone tears cry I lived it all for you, ...

The first has to be my favourite, it's so vibrant and lively and yet I also love the second but can't explain why. Not as fond of the others but ...

River I was pleased with the speed I managed to maintain as I hurtled round obstacles, always heading East. First there was the city, full of various buildings that I ...

I think this poem would work really well if you improved the rhythm of it because the flow seems to pause in places. A few suggestions... I am a different ...

The structure of this piece was very imaginative and I like the connections to music throughout your writing. I'm very tempted to place a comma after fluent though. Not only ...

On Marriage What age is a reasonable age for marriage? If you're in love then 18 is but personally, I'll wait until I'm at least 23. I want to get ...

He pulled his shirt - Here I think you mean he pulled off his shirt. Other than that, it was nice, it was romantic, it was a little unoriginal and ...

I quite liked this but I have to admit that you have some rather extreme characters. Inconsiderate boyfriend. Inconsiderate parents. Inconsiderate persona. Maybe tone down the teen drama a little ...