Rydia

I really liked this, your rhyme scheme is original and I saw the pattern practically straight away but then I've been known to experiment with many a strange structure so ...

I think I shall just do this one line to line, my initial impression of the whole thing is a bit muddled... I can't wait for tomorrow, [Not the most ...

I have to agree that the line 'don't live by what you feel' doesn't really fit. In fact, it's sort of in contrast to the message. I'd have thought that ...

I've tried to reserve judgement on this actually but, to be honest, I think it's a terrible idea. Even if the son is a sensible young man, three weeks is ...

You just go to the user groups section. I suppose I could have a go at setting one up but we have to get a certain amount of people to ...

The chapter wasn't my favourite but it was good. There's a lot of discussions about the war which got a bit repetetive and after all the build up of this ...

Looks interesting... Name= Opal Winter Age= 21 Race= Herkson Other= She is of the Tarka family who's gemstone is an Amethyst. Form= Unicorn. Hair= White, just past her shoulders, wavy. ...

I have to agree that this is too short and there's not really much there. Tell her to work on her imagery and add some more lines. Also, the last ...

Heather heard the call for help and hurried in that direction. "Nutty!" She exclaimed. Her friend was just ahead, sprawled across the floor, a figure hovering over her limp form. ...

Skye I placed a few bits and pieces in a bag. Some clothes, a little food, money, water. That didn't look like a lot so I added a few more ...

Hi, nice to meet you. I shall probably see some of your work and if I do, I'll be sure to leave a few comments.

I found this rather amusing and you actually managed to make it fit into the context of the original story so well done there! I love the colloquial tone this ...

A very interesting concept. It got a little confusing at the end but then I suppose it's supposed to be like that. Just a few suggestions. First of all, I ...

I like the first one best. It's clearer and the tiles of the board look interesting. I wish I had an Alice in Wonderland chess board. The pieces look very ...

River I hurried back to the front with another injured man who was struggling to keep up to find the unconscious form of Hake laying on the ground and Liskano ...