Rydia

1. This is probably my favourite. I like how the sun is centred in the photo. Very pretty. 2. The foreground of this one is nice with that little patch ...

sorry. I went to the kitchen for a snack in the middle of writing my post so I didn't see the previous one. I guess I should have checked afterwards. ...

I liked a lot of your description, very vivid and it added some good characterization but I'll move onto that after I've covered a few specific points - Her red ...

Awww, that was really sweet and your story seemed to reflect the lyrics perfectly. The sisters' personalities are well defined but perhaps you should describe them a little. Not too ...

Falcon "Are we ready to go?" I asked. "Don't we need a plan first?" Ara wondered. "On a mission that's impossible to plan? No. We'll improvise," I decided. Ladreal seemed ...

Skye "Hold still," I murmured as I fluttered up. I took hold of her arms and gently lifted her upright but the rope had tightened around her leg. "Hold her ...

I loved these books and to be honest, I didn't notice any aspects of racism or the thing about 'where.' I don't think anything particularly annoyed me about the books.

Hi there Chelsea, welcome to YWS! If you want any of your work critiqued, I'm always free so just PM me. Nice to meet you, Heather xx

Hi there, nice to meet you Sarah. Welcome to YWS and don't worry about posting your work here, we're all very friendly... that is except for the two cannibals but ...

Hello there, it's lovely to meet you. Congrats on your marriage, I wish you and your husband many happy years together! So do you prefer romance prose or romance poetry? ...

Lol, this is hilarious Claudette! I love that you incorporated the CCF and SPEW that I have been hearing so much about lately. A lovely insight into YWS ;) Just ...

I agree that you need to make Decker's role clearer. I got that he was probably their teacher but not until he was leaving the room. It's good though. Leans ...

Lilly An eagle descended swiftly and as it shot towards the ground, it grew and extended into a human until he landed with a soft thud, both feet on the ...

Kevin "Oh," I replied, slightly shocked. "Yeah," She sighed, cringing inwards as if she could hide from him. I got to my feet and took a few steps forward. At ...

'The air was like a nerve gas: neither he, nor she, could move. Words seeped through trembling lips;' [This opening is beautiful. Your first line is very dramatic and the ...