Rydia

1. Flowers in the attic by Virgina Andrews 2. The Pact by Jodi Picoult Then there are Tess of the Dubervilles (spelt wrong I'm sure). Nearly anything by Catherine Cookson, ...

The first and the last are my favorites of this next batch. The blue symbol in the first is really cool and stands out well against the background. Also, that ...

Nice piece of work here. A few suggestions - Except it didn’t look like a baby since it wasn’t brown and it wasn’t crying like it should had, falling from ...

First, I'll point out the two typos. You should probably read your work through before posting - turning my tears inot anger so that I get so used to the ...

I know you said that this is an extract but it doesn't feel like a script. You can't have thoughts in scripts and actions are supposed to be mentioned briefly ...

Hey Timea! This is going really well, just a few sugestions - “How much farther? It’s getting pretty dark, ya know,” Lira nervously asked. ['Lira asked nervously' might sound a ...

Kevin I picked up Olivia and Roxy not far from the hospital and then rushed into the car park. We jumped out, I locked the doors and we hurried inside. ...

Android 18 "Mommy. Am I coming mommy?" Maron asked, her beautiful eyes looking up at me. I reached down and patted her pretty blond head. "Not this time Maron. Your ...

Lol. Yeah, very fun and catchy. Not a serious poem so I wont critique it as such. I loved all your witty little puns and this has a good tone ...

Wow. The mother is a complicated character, yes? She seems genuinely fond of the younger daughter and acts kindly throughout this chapter until the end with the whip. I am ...

Alice paused for a moment and shut her eyes as if something had fallen into them. Suddenly her lids flashed open and she shuddered. "Are you okay Alice?" Scipio asked. ...

Lily I watched as Zire placed Alexynia by the fire and then stalk away again, Daklana at his side. I didn't trust those two and yet... there was an urge ...

I tried this once a few years back and the format makes for a cute little poem. Your topic was much more original than mine though and the rhyming is ...

This is a little easier to understand than before and it is an improvement so you should be congratulated on that at least. Perhaps next time you change something, leave ...

Hi again! I quite liked this one but it was a little short and you could make some improvements. That second line should be want rather than 'wan' and try ...