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Lily With a regretful sigh, I gently took hold of Alexynia's raised hand. She turned to glare at me in anger and surprise. I winced as the fire flickered towards ...

Skye I rolled my eyes after Lethero and grabbed Aubrey's hand. "I think we'll have to leave the horses behind," I sighed regretfully. "Why?" Aubrey asked. "Because they're too slow. ...

Hi there, just a few specific points first - Instead [A comma here perhaps?] I turned my back and raced down the driveway to apartment number 4. [Write it as ...

Hi there, to be honest this felt a bit like a list and it was rather repetitive. I like the part with the scenario so maybe concentrate on that. Add ...

Awww! Sweet smiley. Is the ball the moon or something?

First off, the comma after chords on the second to last line should be a semi colon or a full stop. As for context, a lot of people seem to ...

Hello again! That was a really sweet chapter and it had a good, slow pace that suits the romantic moment. Here's my usual list of suggestions first - He nodded, ...

Skye "Ask him why we're not welcome here," I suggested. Karana turned back to the man and they exchanged more words. "He says that a wizard is imprisoned not far ...

That's okay. Android 18 I smirked at Vegeta and then turned to face the approaching power. I could just make out the shape of a man, dark against the blue ...

Kevin I watched the Doctor exit the room and then peered around. No other people in white coats were in sight. "Kevin..." Olivia warned, catching my hand, her eyes reproachful. ...

"Yes I am," Alice insisted. "There's something wrong," Scipio protested. "You're hurting my arm," Alice attempted to change the subject. Scipio sighed and let go but followed her up the ...

Skye "Sorry," I mumbled, turning away from Lethero and his meal. Then I heard raised voices and turned to find Lethero already racing back towards the others. I ran forward ...

Lily I turned my head at the sound of wings and watched an owl perch on a branch near by. For an owl it sure was nosy and I couldn't ...

Jayne "California," I replied. "And you Chan?" "New York." "Really? And you came here?" I laughed lightly and shook my head. "Wow. That's got to be a first." Chan hid ...

Android 18 I arrived at the hill to find that Picollo was already there, very stubbornly not taking to Vegeta. I smirked as they both looked up and landed between ...