Rydia

Well seenas there are three year five griffindors... In fact, here's a list that might help everyone - Name House Year Gender Ashton Ravenclaw 4 Male Inu Ravenclaw 4 Female ...

Julia I watched the girl work and couldn't help but notice that her skin had a definate red tinge. At the time, I presumed that she had spent too long ...

Kevin Riley didn't sleep last night and, to be honest, neither did I. I went home. What excuse did I have to stay at the hospital? She wasn't my family. ...

This was really sweet, just a few suggestions - You have always, and to this day, [I don't like 'and to this day.' It doesn't quite fit.] encouraged me to ...

This one is much better than the other two you've written but you repeat 'Mom' a little too often and this could be edited to create a shorter poem with ...

First, here are some changes I would make that relate to grammar, spelling and structure - When we were together , I felt like I was a princess. [s]But[/s] T ...

My first suggestion is that you go and read other people's work and leave them a critique. This should help solve two problems - 1. We have a general rule ...

You could probably find someone to sing this but, to be honest, it's too repetitive and over dramatic for me. There are so many songs out there with the same ...

Yera "Forget the outfits. We have to learn to control these powers first," I decided. "And how do we do that?" Martin asked, absently scrunching up a sweetie wrapper. "Well ...

Lily I glared at Daklana one last time and then turned to observe Alexynia. I straightened her body out gently and tucked a jacket under her head. "Everyone happy?" I ...

River "I don't think it will reach the outskirts of the camp but it should be big enough to take out most of them," I replied, turning towards Kasko who ...

Kate I rolled my eyes as, once more, the hall erupted into cheers as yet another scrawny first year was placed. "Cheer!" The boy beside me hissed, "This one's in ...

Julia I casually wandered through the forest, keeping an eye out for a village. It had been two weeks since I set off on my search and I wasn't particularly ...

Just the one suggestin for this part - Seden and Kiera sat down on Kiera's sleeping mallet, leaning against her cloth-covered walls. [Mallet? I don't think that's the right word. ...

I don't think you info dumped too much and you don't need action in every chapter.Just a few suggestions - Along the wall were lined many large oil lamps, kept ...