Rydia

Julia The dragon... or rather shapeshifter... seemed to be recovering fine and I turned to resume my wanderings. Something was wrong. The tree was gone. I know it sounds strange ...

Kate After lunch, I found myself in the Slytherin common room which was practically vacant. "Where is everyone?" I mumbled as I took a seat in one of the rather ...

Celeste "Just business, Serkas," The woman replied and ran a dagger through the vampire repeatedly until it fell to the ground to lay in a pool of it's own blood. ...

Lol. Stage directions are basically where the script writor tells the actors how to move, where to stand, what to wear and such. Basically, it's where you've described the action; ...

I think that you're allowed explicit content as long as it is rated accordingly and a warning at the top of the piece wouldn't hurt as an extra precaution.

It was interesting to see how you colour your drawings. You have such a different style to my friend Leigh... Lupins' top looks a touch too smart to me but ...

Your rhythm is a little out in places and it was rather simple but I liked this. You had a strong message throughout the poem and it has a lot ...

Lol. I love how casually you contemplate killing the young couple. I don't think it's necessary though; I'm not as bloodthirsty as Claudette. I like how you tied everything together ...

Wow. This was amazing Jiggity. You have a really strong skill in creating atmosphere; this whole piece felt really dark and eerie. Your characterisation in the first was really good ...

I'm intrigued. I should certainly like to see where you go with this. A very random start to what will most likely be a random tale... Oh and I like ...

This was certainly a lot clearer and easier to understand. A few suggestions - He was after her because s he had seen him kill his wife. The rain stopped ...

into a vacuum faraway. [Did you mean to write far away as 'faraway' or is that just a typo? Either way, I think it works better with the two words ...

This was a really good start. I take it the shadowed figure, the demon and infra are all the same? If so, use INFRA the whole time. I can see ...

Yera "You got a better idea?" Martin asked. "Maybe they're triggered by thought?" Tabitha suggested. "Well that's easy to test. Yera, think about putting your hand through the treehouse floor," ...

Oh good. I'm rather fond of this one... Alicia "Positions everyone!" Crys commanded. There was no time to introduce the three humans he and Cole had found but it was ...