Rydia

Those are cool. Your colours are really bold and I like the style of writing.

Thanks for the comments! You're right, that sentence needs looking at... I shall find somewhere to put a comma. Also, I understand why you highlighted 'realised' but it's spelt like ...

Melody I tossed and turned on the bed and then it began. If I had thought I felt pain before, that was nothing compared to this and suddenly, objects began ...

Julia "Why hello there," I greeted yet another creature who appeared to have joined our group. "Don't mind Warren, he's just developed a liking for flying." "Ooh. A Gryphon! Now ...

Ah, well not a scene as such but I meant where we get to see his thoughts on the 'Thing.' I suppose I should be more specific.

It's just fine =) Melody "Come on. We should get out of here. I know a place where we can hide," Ryaka offered. I hesitated but, looking into those eerie, ...

Wow. The plot line for this is really good. I'd like more description of the scenes and characters but this has an awful lot of potential. I particularly enjoyed the ...

I like 'Paint the Town Red' but I think you need something that's going to stand out a bit more. Perhaps a title that refers to the orbs or the ...

Melody I stepped away from the boy so that I had my back against the alley wall. "Who sent you?" I asked carefully, reaching for a handful of stones. "No ...

"Wait!" Heather called to Scipio as he headed for the hangers. "Here. Take my sword, you need a propper weapon." "Thanks, Heather," Scipio replied, taking hold of the weapon. "I ...

I have to agree with the other two. I mean I read it all but it would be so much easier if we just start from sort of the end ...

A necromancer then. They're super powerful wizards with death magic.

Melody I pushed past many people running in the opposite direction and then turned for a quick glance at the warehouse; at Maverhov's headquarters. That was when I knew for ...

Kate "Sure," Lindsay replied as if it were no big deal and I sat and we talked and we ate and for the first time in my life I felt ...

Hmm. Werewolf with long hair? Which one? Or don't you mind?