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Julia "That's a strange name. I'm Julia. Do you know much about the library?" "The library?" He asked. "Yeah. That's the reason you're following us, right? Or was you just ...

"You guys seem to have a lot of enemies," Heather noted as she retrieved her sword from Scipio. "Who would we fight if we didn't? We have to protect the ...

Olivia "We were," I eplied with a toothy grin and one of the vampires stumbled back a few steps. "You say you came to introduce yourselves so do so," Slade ...

I love the snowflakes and great colours! It looks a touch slanted but then, that just adds to the effect. Very nice.

The triplets are great and I think they're both very cute and pretty. The weapons are cool and I love how you've drawn their outfits; very good. I think the ...

Part one - Your description is amazing and the characterization for Toc is great. The other three characters all seemed rather similar but that's okay, you'll have plenty of time ...

This is a good, little story Lindsay. I have to agree that some extra description would be nice and I'd like it if you explained who Tammy is but, other ...

This was really sweet and some of your descriptions are lovely but I'd quite like to know more of what your characters look like. It's not necessary; just a preference. ...

I think the others caught the slight problems but she is really pretty! I'm glad that you made her hair a darker shade of red than Ginny's (Or at least ...

Olivia "This way," I murmured, "Smells like vampire." "Yeah," Kelsey agreed. "I heard another over here," Slade hissed, heading east slightly. "And one just beyond that hill," Ariel noted. I ...

Anything beginning with S? Hmmm. How about Sugar? Hehe. Or Snake? Or I could always stick with Saurabh. How do you pronounce that by the way? I'd quite like to ...

Melody "He wishes to see us all," The man declared as he returned. "Then let's not keep him waiting," The older one, Lord Ferskos the woman had called him, hobbled ...

I think the freckles are a little dark and he's too young and lanky to be my type but then, I go for tall, dark and handsome ;) Putting that ...

Hi, I saw your message on the other board and noticed that this one has no critiques so... here I am =) I liked this piece in general but there's ...

First, some general observations. The structure of this story is very much like a list. First you list the number of victims, the the two types of victims, then the ...