Rydia

I sort of can but the lines are very pale so it's hard to make out. What I can see of it is really good. The expression is really good ...

Olivia "Of course," I replied, retreating from my kill so the vampires could have their share. "Thanks," Riley said. "So what do you guys do for fun around here?" Kelsey ...

As many characters as we want? Bad move! I think I shall start with two... Name= Dahlia Gender= Female Age= 19 Country= Mountain Occupation= Healer Appearance= Dark, chocolate brown skin ...

Mathew From the top of the dliff I watched as Trinity and Johnathon approached. They walked one behind the other, both looking thoughtful and perhaps a touch worried. "What took ...

Ooooh that's nice. I like the attention to detail you have and the use of colour is good. Who's going to name it?

The descriptions in this are pleasant and I like your general theme and the extended metaphor. However, it has some grammatical errors but they shouldn't be hard to clear up. ...

My first impression of this is that I like it but it should be more regular. You started off really well with some strong, regular rhymes and an almost regular ...

Oh no, poor Gladman! You can't leave it there, I want to know if he gets eaten! I wasn't expecting Tempo to return to be honest so that was a ...

Melody We entered a large, spacious room that was occupied by some very ornate furniture. Towards the left of the room was a large, mahogany chair that was smothered in ...

Add another two to my earlier calculations. Now I have 11 on the first page =)

"So I'll see you at midnight?" Heather turned to face Alice who shook her head and indicated that she should follow. Filled with curiosity, Heather did so and they headed ...

Could I have two characters? If you let me have two I shall make my second a boy looking for romance :wink: Either way, here's my first character - Name= ...

Olivia As soon as I saw the herd of deer, I ran to the left and Kelsey took the right. Automatically, we circled around the herd and then closed in ...

Kate I didn't want to disturb the two couples so I headed a little further from Hagrid's hut and sat down in the grass. Sarabella soon came to join me, ...

Lilly I pictured a large, beautiful forest full of birds singing and little animals scampering about and then thought over and over again - the largest forest in the world, ...