Rydia

I think most of the grammar and structure mistakes have been caught again so I'll just give you the same advice as before on that - go through and update ...

Maybe. It depends on my teachers and how much homework they give me when I return to school.

Julia I was a reluctant participation in the dance of death but the creatures gave me no choice. The first went down soon enough, his head rolling into the distance, ...

This is a really good start Pol but you should probably update the thread now - make the corrections that people have suggested to you and then it will be ...

Some physical description of the character and scenery would be nice and would help reveal a lot about May but what you have implies that she would make a very ...

Done Firestarter and not the best critique but seriously, it's such a great poem that there's so little to pick apart. As for a return critique, I already owe you ...

I love how deep this poem is and it's so well written! This is the sort of piece that I find myself re-reading so that I can give the words ...

Okay, so I have two weeks before I return to college and [s]I'm trying to avoid my homework[/s] I'm a really lovely, caring person so I'd love to take a ...

I like this. There's a lot of emotion in this story, your description is nice and it's a brilliant opening. I'd love to see where you go with this and ...

Hey Reyu! I love the story so far. You portrayed Loki really well and I like your descriptions and I must say, I love the use of the yin and ...

Wasn't sure what to rate it but I'm sure you get the idea. My sister created this using the gimp (Similar to photoshop) and, yes, she has a user but ...

Hi Rhea and welcome to YWS! If you need a critique or help navigating the site then feel free to pm me and don't worry, I'm one of the ones ...

Of course you're welcome to return and it's nice to meet you. You have a very good story here with a nice, sophisticated style. Your characters are interesting and believable ...

Kate I did intend to return to the the Slytherin common room but then I decided to practice a little more so I angled my broom towards the forest and ...

Luke I led Amanta over to a small clearing where some soldiers were setting up General Samak's tent. When they had finished, we ducked inside and were soon joined by ...