Rydia

I'm not too bad at maths so feel free to ask me any questions you have and I'll try to explain it to you.

This is really good, Amelia and I love how you've introduced the characters. A few specific points first... DEE Stop dawdling, the both of you. Now as I was saying. ...

I think Crystal's poise is too strong. In the story you portray her as weakened by her time in the forest and the picture of her should reflect that. Also, ...

Matt "You're wrong there. He certainly should have jumped in front of you. If you'd been hit, it would have taken John and me too long to hack into that ...

Celeste I took a deep breath as the final creature advanced. I began to mumble an incantation while moving my arms in intricate patterns. I released the spell just in ...

Sorry this took so long... I tend to start with general comments but this piece is in parts so I think I shall get the specific suggestions out of the ...

Julia My heart felt lighter once Karana and Warren were out of the battle and I fought on almost absently, a faint smile upon my face. I drew backwards, within ...

Matt "Damn," I swore as I hurriedly pulled my shirt off, tearing it into pieces. I took the sleeve and bound it tightly around John's arm before bunching the other ...

"And that's the only way?" Nutty asked. Mattster nodded. "Okay then let's do it. Next stop, planet Earth." "Yay," Alice cheered, much less enthusiastic than before. "Time for a real ...

Kalilah The first pirate walked around us and I blushed as he very bluntly inspected us. When he made his way around to me, I forced my eyes forward and ...

This was sweet. It certainly gives some good background on Gladman and it's nice to know that TEMPO is going to fight on the right side. Good work as always ...

Hey Areida! This is amazing. I just had to say that first. As for suggestions... The plot of this is fantastic. I really admire how well you've integrated the beauty ...

Magic - Would you like me to look at the picture you posted too? I think I will... Amelia - Yes, I'm still offering and if you'd like to return ...

Julia I hit the ground hard and almost wished for the peace that dagger would have granted me but, looking at Karana, I knew I couldn't give up. I had ...

Lol. It was a rather enthusiastic response and this isn't quit what I had in mind when I wrote my response but sure, why not. A pen pal wouldn't hurt.