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Celeste Eve took Corelle aside for a moment and I took a few more steps before coming to an abrupt stop. Zora turned and raised an eyebrow. "What is it?" ...

Kate I left Jesse at the entrance and headed for the Slytherin common room.Fortunately everybody seemed to have already left so I ran a brush through my hair and applied ...

Kalilah "Don't touch him!" I screached as the doctor leaned down towards Jhadi. He hesitated, hand still outstretched. "Why?" The doctor queried. "Because... because I don't trust you. You'll hurt ...

Oh wow, you do have an interesting main character. She will be brilliant in the storybook! And I love the plot so far and your description is beautiful. Just a ...

Sorry. The assassins are there because they're spying on them and at the beginning, Amanta and Luke are talking alternatively, starting with Luke. And the first Assassin to speak is ...

Hey there Snoink. Just a quick note to say that I'm dropping out of the competition for your 'apocalypse' post again but I thought you might as well have my ...

Generally I liked this but I do have one piece of criticism - drop the weapons list. It's okay to mention a few of the different weapons and describe them ...

It's looks a little bare in places but the graphics and text are cool. I think the monster on the left is my favourite. I love the vibrant colours and ...

Lol. That's pretty cool but it seems rather pointless and maybe you should have the glowy lines in different colours. I think that would look really good and you could ...

No crits on this one? I shall soon correct that... Let's start with a few corections first and then I'll make some general observations - As he stood he brushed ...

Hmm. I think you need to linger more on Jhere's death and certainly cut down the number of shades Khor kills. But yeah, Jhere shouldn't die so suddenly. By this ...

Lol. Don't worry, they're all being sarcastic, including Dreamy, especially Dreamy in fact. But seenas it's done by a member of the brilliant SPEW, I feel obliged to say that ...

Julia "You're looking at her," I giggled and rolled my eyes when Seeker turned to face me. "Not me, silly. Karana. But don't worry. Sonya knows a few bits and ...

Just a few points the others missed and generally I liked this section but I agree that the students wouldn't just sit inside and discuss the danger... [s]He[/s] His face ...

The second is my favourite. I love the angle and that fallen tree is positioned perfectly. The first one on the other hand has a nice feel of dsaster and ...