Rydia

As far as plot and such goes, this was great but your writing seemed a little choppy. A few suggestions - Knall glanced up to check that [s]and make sure[/s] ...

I live in a little village called Brayton which is near Selby which is near York. Not exactly close but I wouldn't mind travelling a little.

Hehe. Perhaps we can try a mini meeting first Jasmine. I'm certainly going to have to come visit you in Ireland one day!

Oh wow, that's a great idea for a competition. Thanks Matt!

I think money's more the problem for me. I could probably manage next summer but how much would flights from England cost?

Olivia "Yeah," I replied. "Yeah I do." Danny grunted and turned away. We walked further into the forest in silence until we reached the werewolf sentries who marked the edge ...

Kalilah When Jhadi burst into the room I used this distraction to struggle away from the pirate and then turned and ducked away from him. Stepping back, I encountered a ...

Julia "That sounds like a good idea," I replied with my grin back in place. "All children need their rest." Karana turned and gaved me a confused look. She didn't ...

This is very short so my first piece of advice is to extend it. Not loads because it will work best as a short story but add a few details ...

Kalilah At my shout, Jhadi had no option but to leap up and then Nina began to struggle, knocking the pirates to the floor. Well all followed suit and just ...

Lol. Well of course it's popular and yes it's been achieved on a small scale but wouldn't it be amazing to all meet one day? To have at least 1000 ...

Kalilah Suddenly a load roar silenced everyone and the captain stepped forward. "Silence!" He repeated again. "Get the women into that corner, men. Doctor, take a look at the boy. ...

Olivia Danny and I ran through the forest back towards our own territory. We were both in human form and both bare foot but now the grass was soft below ...

Julia I awoke and stretched my stiff limbs before gazing up at the sky. The sun had risen completely now. In fact, it was almost noon. Stiffling a yawn, I ...

Hi Jabber. You say you're worried about the length and normally I would say that as long as it's all relevant, you should extend and extend and extend as much ...