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Hi there. I notice that you've posted your edited version twice in two different forums. You should probably delete one of them or have a moderator do it for you. ...

Hi there Kyte. First off, this is a little short and it feels rather rushed but I love the magical element it has. Starting with the dream/ vision isn't such ...

Hi there! I see you're new here so welcome to the site. We have a general rule that new members have to critique other people's work before posting their own ...

Am I problem? I’m always the problem! [Let's start with the typo shall we? That should probably 'Am I the problem.'] In general, I think you need to do a ...

The others have caught most of your typos and such but here are a few more and some general observations - Khor whipped [Should be wiped.] the sweat rolling off ...

Thanks so much for the feedback everyone! Kyte - Dark fiction is probably right and the doll is actually Samuel's sister. It was just my way of describing her. Gadi ...

I'd be willing to give it another go =)

Tylar "You going to that funeral?" Pyro asked casually. "No," I replied. "I'm going out scouting for new recruits. Want to come?" Pyro hesitated for a moment and then nodded ...

Hey there, welcome to the site. What do you need help with my friend? Feel free to pm me or post a few questions here.

Kate I took a shallow breath and then followed Adam deeper and deeper into the heart of the castle. The passageway turned a corner and as he turned, I caught ...

Oh wow, I don't think I had Alice on my list. How could I forget Alzz? Sorry! 27. Writingluver5 28. Author13

Julia I sat back down beside the stream and then layed my head on the ground, relaxing against the soft, springy grass. Something felt different. Something felt wrong. The water ...

"How come it didn't work?" Heather wondered. "The lack of the revenge factor, remember?" Mattster sighed and then turned eagerly to Bella who was still examining the handle. "Go on ...

Caleb I watched as the kid was lowered into the hole. I'd known him. Not well admittedly but enough to merit an invite to his damn funeral. Poor kid. It's ...

Awesome, I'm on another list! You are so on mine writingluver =)