Rydia

Arianna I slipped out of the class when the bell rang, relieved to exit the classroom. The hallways were packed but somehow I managed to squeeze through and I flipped ...

Kate All the way to Hagrid's hut, Adam shouted and swore at us one minute, completely under the control of some unknown menace, but the next he would be begging ...

Thank you so much! You're right, the dialogue punctuation is atrocious as is the characterization, the view points etcetra. I am very fond of the plot however. Especially of what ...

Scipio struggled to his feet, slipping in the muddy puddles he had fallen into and clutching the left arm he had fallen upon. "Ow," He mumbled, glaring down at the ...

name: Rydia, Kitty, Kit, Heather, Kitty15, Sabre, Shopa, Pat Buchanan, Pulchra, Ry. I answer to a lot of names, even 'you over there' would suffice. age: 22. what you write: ...

Hello there! Just thought I'd let you know that we like new members to critique two pieces of work before they post their own but no worries, just do so ...

Hey there, it's nice to meet you and welcome to YWS! What genre do you like to write? Anything in particular? And if you'd like help navigating the site or ...

Nope, not 6'5''. That would be very tall. I'm about 5'6'' or 5'7'' I think.

Arianna A girl burst into the class-room, slightly late, and collapsed into a seat, breathing heavily. I recognised her as Skylar, a rather strange human who was obsessed with the ...

I don't mind, kitty or Heather are both fine. And yes, David does seem to be very popular. I know a few other people's fathers who share the name too. ...

There was lots of action and tension in this section which is great and I'm actually starting to feel a little sorry for Khor though, to be honest, I wouldn't ...

Hey there canis, it's nice to meet you. I love living in England. It's so pretty and the architecture in York (where I go to colege) is amazing. The chavs ...

Hey there Tic! It's lovely to meet you and welcome to YWS. I'm Heather and if you need help navigating around the site or would like a critique, feel free ...

Arianna I sang softly to myself as I walked along the path on my way to school but a quick glance at my watch showed that I was very soon ...

Hmmm. I think Khor creates a few too many items for the cell. If each spell hurts him, wouldn't it be wiser to just provide himself with the basics or ...