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Hey there, LJ and welcome to YWS! Just thought I'd tell you a little about our buddy system. If you're feeling a little overwhelmed or have some questions, then you ...

Kate "Take her to Madam Pomfrey of course," Hagrid decided. "Come along now and I'll explain everything to the head." "Madam Pomfrey?" Alice whimpered, her face showing no recognition of ...

Hmmm. I know I need to get my character over to where you guys are but Jenna mentioned that it's 11 AM in her post and for my character it's ...

Luke I opened my mouth to finish the sentence I had started and then changed my mind. "You forest people are strange," Aren frowned and seemed to have her mind ...

Caleb The owner of the weapons shop returned within the hour and informed me that Kurokawa was not available. "Okay," I gave a half shrug, "I suppose I'll find another ...

Arianna "Man overboard!" I shouted as Kristina hit the floor with a soft thud and began to wave frantically as if struggling to keep above the water. I pretended to ...

Again, you need to expand on your description but the meetings between the kitten and the car and the kitten and the people were good. You have some nice dialogue ...

Writing from the point of view of a cat is interesting and the idea intrigues me but I think this could have been better. Consider the five senses when you're ...

First off, either you or some helpful mod needs to add a rating to this. Then, you need to fix your grammar before the rest of the poem can be ...

Claire says she'll post either tonight or tomorrow but she's a little busy at the moment so one of my posts will have to do for now. Isabelle The Bridge ...

Hmm. I think that the basic plot, well the basic question rather is a good place to start but the punctuation needs some work and it's a touch abrupt. I ...

Okay, well this is certainly in the right section...

Eleanor Fawkes We practiced fencing for a further two hours before the instructor called a break and the squires dispersed. I crossed the field to the small, water fountain and ...

Hey there Clau! I love the imagery behind 'crinkled pages,' there's so much that can be deciphered from just those two words. The rest of the first line is good ...

Hey there and welcome to YWS! If you have any questions or would like a critique on some of your work, then feel free to pm me. Hope you enjoy ...