Rydia

I think the shading could be improved and the others are right about him being stiff but generally he's really good. I like how you've done his paws and the ...

Julia I slipped through the floor and stared at the vast cavern that greeted us. The rocky walls were smoothly carved and rounded at all edges so that it was ...

Arianna I awoke early and stumbled towards the bathroom where I splashed the cool, cleansing water across my face and ran the minty toothpaste across my teeth. Re-entering my room, ...

It is very rare that I can read a piece of work (professional or not) and have no suggestions for improvement. I think that your language is beautiful and you ...

Fish.

My first suggestion for this is to tidy it up a bit. The punctuation could be improved and your word choice is rather unoriginal. If you extend it then you ...

Hello again! I really liked this chapter - your descriptions are brilliant as always and the plot wasn't as action packed as usual but the relationships are all developing well. ...

Julia "Okay," The dragon began as the rest of our group caught up, filtering into the room, "the rules are simple. All you have to do is find my treasure." ...

Hi there, it's lovely to meet you and welcome to the site! I'm Heather but feel free to call me Kitty. Actually, I'd like to tell you a little about ...

Eleanor Fawkes I reached Lady Claire's room and hesitantly raised my fist. For a moment, I let it hand there between myself and the door while I debated the pros ...

Wow, thanks so much Jasmine =) And yes, I'm very attached to the name Amelia but this is the first story I used it in and she's rather a different ...

Hello again! This is a very short section, isn't it? You have some interesting dialogue, still lacking a bit where description is concerned but good plot and overall, it's going ...

Well I don't know what Eye-dialect is but why not just use phonetic spelling? I always find that the easiest way to convey a character's accent. For German, they tend ...

Hi there, this appears to be your first post? Well, welcome to the site! Could you please critique a few pieces of work before you post your next piece? We ...

I think that 'shotting' should be shooting and I think you need a warning in your title of this post for the swearing but yeah, it sounds like a good ...