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Scipio led Alice out to the centre of Town and they wound their way past stalls and people until they found a vacant space where a few people with instruments ...

I like it! Admittedly, the shape needs some work but your shading is nice and it's a good, rough sketch. Maybe you could have a whole bowl of SS fruit!

Amelia "I'll work for three coppers an hour!" One man shouted, springing to his feet. "Oh but I'll work for two!" Another countered. "Tha's nothin' cos I'll work for one ...

Hmmm. I do like being kitty15 but Sharky is starting to sound rather tempting or perhaps Rocky? Hmmm. No. I think I'll stay with Kitty for now but should the ...

Coal Riding along the road, I soon came across a young woman. She wasn't particularly pretty with hard, blue eyes and a sickly complexion but she had that look of ...

Hmmm. Name him what you want and I think he's a very witty man with a good sense of humour and a good heart but if you want him to ...

Thanks Twit! And here's the re-write. Draft number two... My Personal Statement. Having immensely enjoyed both Law and English Literature at college, I would prefer to take a combined degree ...

Thanks all and congratulations to the other seven =)

Julia "Ryouku!" Warren shouted, pounding on the door. "Forget this, he can't hear us!" I realised. Phasing through the others, I made my way up the ladder and through the ...

Hello again! I think those are some excellent changes! I wouldn't have a comma at the end of 'surface' though and I think 'sense' should be since? But other than ...

Some of the lines are a little rough but it's really cute! And that is one awesome hair style. If you want to make it scary, the eye will certainly ...

3:16 pm Katalyn I shook my head slowly and watched numbly as the man hurtled around the store, asking after Keri, shouting her name and finally he collapsed against a ...

Julia "I was thinking about that actually, what if when he said key, he meant a metaphorical key?" I mused. "How do you mean?" Warren asked. "I think she means ...

This is a strange but interesting little poem. I think the structure needs some work because at the moment, you have your line breaks in some irrational places but the ...

I think you did very well. The flow needs some work in places but generally, it's very smooth and you have some great imagery. Here's a quick line by line ...