Rydia

Oooh, this looks interesting! Name= Jaqueline Thompson Nickname= Jackie or Jack Age= 19 Gender= Female Rhyme= Jack and Jill Family= A twin sister called Jillian (Jill) Thompson. Appearance= Long, curl

I think you have some lovely imagery here but you need to expand on those images and some of your rhyming sounds a bit forced. A lot of it is ...

1. I think you could cut out quite a lot of the sky to draw more attention to the clouds and islands but it's very scenic and I love the ...

This is really good! I think the nose could be a little better but the eyes are beautiful and the hair is very well drawn. The bottom eyelashes on the ...

Coal "That depends," I replied with just a touch of hesitation. She ignored this but the slight shifting of her shoulders told me she was at least a little curious. ...

Amelia The first day the pickings were very slim and I found only one additional member to our crew, fulfilling the placement of cook. As I headed back down to ...

Natalie I ran a brush through my long, golden hair, systematically removing all the knots and tangles of the past day before laying the tool down, exactly parallel with the ...

Day 1 3:30pm Katalyn "Yeah," Dave replied, "I'm not letting you out of my sight again." Keri smiled at him weakly and together we headed towards the back of the ...

Way to go Matt! Congratulations!

Thanks for the comments all, those are some really helpful suggestions and I'll cetainly take another look at this! It's been a while since I've written an archaic poem actually. ...

Hey Jess! Welcome to the site. I would say that it's lovely to meet you but then I already have so, it's lovely to see you here? Anyway, feel free ...

Hey Callisto, welcome to the site!

Not so common in England. Lol. Thanks for the info =)

Arianna We walked the last two blocks to the cinema and I let Lucy choose the film and pay for her ticket. "Hey!" The ticket seller called after us. "No ...

Yes. It's important to respect other people's faith and if Muslims are going to live within our societies, they need the opportunity to see a Muslim doctor. Also, I think ...